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Oct 01, 2018
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With Relish
the Ferris wheel
picked us up
the bottle toss
was a ringer
the horses took a
victory lap
and our hot dogs
were topped
with relish
About This Poem
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Comments
Shadowdancer3349
6 years 9 months ago
Greg
sounds like fun pure and simple brings back younger days
gregwa8
6 years 9 months ago
love a trip to the fair!
love a trip to the fair!