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lovedly
lovedly
Oct 03, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Only for Tonight..Come

Come my love
fear not the ailing one
come lie on my shoulders
but just for one more time
let’s cuddle

the waterfalls have now gone dry
‘tis been years passed shy
now as the end approaches
why be wry
lets within each other lie
simply just try

Such another moment
may not come again
then why would you want to ever
lament
our love we did not finally cement

come upon my cheeks
plant a kiss
the last one may be

for a life which just gradually ebbs away
can we recall at all at our free will
come let me embrace you finally
the heavens alone are witness
I loved only thee
why now distance yourself from me
let me die with glee
as you are still besides me

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Once so many poems flow down the stream many have to scream why have you not saved me from drowning O NEOS

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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Comments

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

6 years 9 months ago

True love,

True love as we grow old, perhaps we grow to familiar and find there is no more mystery. Regards Roscoe...

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 9 months ago

Hi Lovedly

Hi Lovedly
I like your poem,
The confusion of images like lament - cement,
planted kisses, makes me suspect you are joking and pleeding in the same time.
What was your intention?

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 9 months ago

now you make me wonder Irene

so far I did wander

a dying man's desire
to have his first days replay
That is what I thought

sad it didn't properly convey ..

Do kindly spare time
to help me so correctly say
if you may

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 9 months ago

Dear Lovedly,

Dear Lovedly,
Poetry is very subjective and my opinion is probably just one of a million others that may be closer to truth.
I gladly offer it to you anyway.
But know that you can send me to hell anytime.
First,
the level of language if it is Shakespeare's time, then I would lose the word cement (it was invented in 1824 and came into common language even later).
I prefer the modern language.
Which one do you prefer?

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 9 months ago

modern of course

I am an ultra modern guy not shy reality is my life an exposed book am I not only open you know why and to help this loner do try You are a great one that's why I said take over as
NEO CEO .....Glad you have been selected
ALL MY GOODEST WISHES

But how can u ever this say
''''''But know that you can send me to hell anytime.....'''''''

have I till today
lol i know
smile

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 9 months ago

Smiles and smiles and smiles

Smiles and smiles and smiles
If you moden than keep cement in your poem.
I like it very much.
Will you replace the archaic words and let's read it again.

IRiz

IRiz

6 years 7 months ago

Come my love,

Come my love,
fear not the ailing one,
come lie on my shoulder
for one more time.

Now,
as the end approaches,
why be wry?
Lets within each other lie.

Such another moment
may not be again.
Come upon my cheeks,
plant a kiss.
Life gradually ebbs away.

May I place this shortened version of your poem on Instagram and sign it "Lovedly"?

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 7 months ago

your blesssings

your graceful hands
up on my shoulders I bow
Irene thanks you found in me
a poem
yes gracious