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Oct 24, 2018
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Life is just a Mirage
Beautiful oasis you share with all
life is one such a fantasy too
we all know that today we are
tomorrow we may not be
'twill be an imagination
a real illusion may call it thee
but life transforms
from diamond to steel
and
in the cauldrons of times heat
we all melt too
what of a superficial mirage say you
We are as naught
all hope you knew
as we approach it
the further it moves
life so does evaporate too
a hallucination is what we all are
Me, we, he, she and you
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
zebra
6 years 9 months ago
Lovely Lovedly. some may the
Lovely Lovedly. some may say the universe, a crime without a criminal
"a voyeur possessed
of a fictional self in a run on dream
of passed and future
absent of a present"
IRiz
6 years 9 months ago
If a hallucination permuted
If a hallucination permitted to make a comment, I like your poem and its genuine sadness.
If not permitted, I will nod silently.
lovedly
6 years 9 months ago
well Irene this time your comment and the one above
really floor me
owing to a failing in me
i CAN'T decipher clearly
Anyway thanks to IRIZ
who at least nods for me