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Nov 21, 2018
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The girl
The girl from the Meterainian
Smelled like yesterday
It wasnt the nature of the intelligence agencies
To move lines on the map
Yet China asked for the rights
Diplomats were dispatched from across the globe.
The man screemed dont worry
Because mine is constant.
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Race_9togo
6 years 11 months ago
Hi Hero,
How are these different lines connected?
zebra
6 years 11 months ago
Hi
It wasnt the mature of the intelligence agencies ??? fix wasn't It wasn't the mature (what)
Yet China asked for the rights ??????… what are you saying? The rights for what ?
screened screamed is what I think you mean
werr where
With all due respect I don't get it
lovedly
6 years 11 months ago
every poetry must have a conveyance you must know too
what you want to say
And edit you may
many typos could be avoided and 'tis
Mediteranian
I suppose
any way welcome
you have been here
only two days no!