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Feb 03, 2019
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Another Dawn Dawns
Dawn of April
or
be it my only
Dawn
when she was young
and
we both in love
were war torn
you have dished out a poem of reality
all one needs to do is now
just think what is the whole truth
sure enough
you will beat me
as I don't believe in
SPIRITUALITY
my life swims on
the surf of human
REALITY
be as it may
I know when comes
my day
I will be merged with clay
somewhere far away
none know that pathway
it's different for each one
possibly we can this say
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
6 years 5 months ago
I wish you had...
left out the element of rhyme in this. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly
6 years 5 months ago
why so
Geezer
its just natural
Geezer
6 years 5 months ago
It didn't seem...
a smooth transition from free verse to rhyme. It left one wondering what happened and brought me to re-read with that clouding the result of the poem. ~ Geezer.
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lovedly
6 years 5 months ago
thanks Geez
then I may have to rewrite it
and as not many devote more time to oldies
I feel twill be wasteful
I have reduced my poetry posting here
as you may have noticed
still I will c
thanks for your second coming