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Geezer
Geezer
Mar 10, 2019 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Love poems

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Face Time... March Contest

My heart still skips a beat
whenever our lips meet
No other thrill so sweet
Like some exotic treat

Your face to mine and mine to yours
I always feel the thrill
My heart still skips a beat, my love
I think it always will

So kiss me hard, kiss me long
Kisssss me time again
I love when our lips are meeting
It doesn't matter when

I taste your soul, I love you more
I'll always want your kiss
No matter what the time is, love
I'll never want to miss

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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scribbler

6 years 3 months ago

Hi Gee

"do meet" you use this twice and both times they do sound forced. In line @ you could say something like "whenever your and my lips meet" to take care of it.In stanza 3 line 3 something like"every time that our lips meet". All that aside I like this examination of kissing lol. Now to go find Susan and practice what you preach ....................................stan

Geezer

Geezer

6 years 3 months ago

I like both...

of your suggestions! Thanks for the crit. I try to "practice" every day; I know they say practice makes perfect, but I still think I can get better. ~ Gee.
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Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 3 months ago

A great song

It has all the best quality of lyrics and would be great with music. Give it to tony Bennett!
As a poem it suffers the same things as most good lyric. It’s obvious, catchy, sentimental, and about romantic love. What are 95% of love songs about? This is a great song.

Geezer

Geezer

6 years 3 months ago

I'm not much...

for love poems or songs, but I do love kissing my wife. Is Tony Bennet still alive? I thought he died a few years back. Thanks for the comment. ~ Geezer.
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Eumolpus

Eumolpus

6 years 3 months ago

O yes he’s quite alive

At 92 still singing and painting pictures.
I agree with Paul McCartney : “ silly love songs/what’s wrong with that/I’d like to know... “ I think from the wings album