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Rula
Rula
Mar 11, 2019 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Silly Me

I travelled once to the land of imagery
Where I bumped into a poe-tree
That fruits a tasting variety
Of alliteration and simile
I dunno, they fell on me
Ever since I scribble poetry.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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Geezer

Geezer

6 years 4 months ago

A funny take...

on what we poets do. I'm not sure when I was first really attracted to poetry and thinking that I could do that! I like the way you brought our attention to [similes, alliteration and imagery] and the clever
poe-tree line. ~ Geezer.
.

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Gee

Much appreciate your kind visit. I hoped that this would bring more traffic of poets telling how did they start their scrabbling.
Much appreciate it.

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Mark

Many thanks. In fact It's the tree thing that I was looking for rather than the transcription of the word, but I do appreciate your thoughts and suggestions.

S

scribbler

6 years 4 months ago

Hi Rula

That same dang tree fell on me TWICE. Once about 50 years ago when I wrote my first poem. But my hard head didn't take the first hint so another treee was felled on me about 10 years ago when I promptly wrote my second poem lol. Enjoyed you light hearted but hardly silly poem........stan

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Ha

thank you Stan. I'm happy to know that the poe-tree did its job quite perfectly hehehe.
Thanks for the kind visit. Much appreciate it!

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Hello Raj

Wonder where have you been.
Truly missed your posts here.
Looking forward to reading yours soon.
Thanks for passing by.

R

raj

6 years 4 months ago

Lost the muse ...hope it

Lost the muse ...hope it returns...
........................................................

Cloudthings

Cloudthings

6 years 4 months ago

Hey Rula!

This made me smile, a good indication it hit the spot - enjoyed your playfulness & the rhythm & articulation were great.

Beaute little poem from the Poe-tree!

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Ha

Thank you Anni... Much appreciate your kind visit to my page

Cloudthings

Cloudthings

6 years 4 months ago

Just rereading

I love this as it is... but wondered if you wanted it to have a neater rhythmic flow you could try these two last lines to keep the fit better?

"I travelled once to the land of imagery
Where I bumped into a poe-tree
That fruits a tasting variety
Of alliteration and simile"

I dunno how, they fell on me
Ever since I scribble poetry.

Just a thought xx

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Can't agree more.

Shall implement the suggestion with much appreciation for the spot on feedback.
Thank you anni

T

trekker

6 years 4 months ago

Silly Me

I love it and the length is perfect. A very clever piece in which I love the imagery of the tree. This is a keeper! Thankyou

Rula

Rula

6 years 4 months ago

Thank you

Trekker.
My pleasure to see you reading my little piece, and finding it clever adds to my pleasure.
Thank you