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A Leaf, A Journey

I laughed in the summer sun
I twirled and danced had fun
There on this high place I knew of life
This was me great fun no strife

Then chill winds did blow
My life source started fading away
Colours were changed each day
Green to gold it was the way

Secrets not told to me
How my life force failed
I would fall and be so alone
This is all you need as one

My life source did let me go
I felt so free then I started to flow
Down from the heavens you see
To touch the earth more to be

Why was this life so cruel to me?
A summer on high now this destiny
Laying here is this eternity
No I was told by my Mother tree

So day on day I let things go
To the Earth each part just so
There to change once more
Particles through forest floor

I became a food source
That my Mother held
She took me set me free
A bud on a beautiful tree

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A piece on continuity

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UK, GBR

Favorite Poets: Wordsworth, and most I have read., This month My pic is a modern painting of a Sparrow that I have decoupaged, The artist was not mentioned but many thanks to the one that made the original..

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Geezer

Geezer

6 years 3 months ago

The way...

of life. From bud to leaf, to fallen feed of the forest! Elegant and charming look at the continuity of life.
~Gee.
.

Sparrow

Sparrow

6 years 2 months ago

Gee

Thanks for your visit and I am pleased that you liked this write,
Take care out there and know you are thought of, Yours, Ian

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 2 months ago

Ian

you and I
are now like two
yellow leaves

lying lonely STREWN
as once were twins
in GARDEN OF ADEN
not E

do u agree

Sparrow

Sparrow

6 years 2 months ago

Loved

Many thanks for your visit but Aden is only what we make of it even the desert has a beauty to behold and write of, As to laying around turning yellow not a chance Summer is coming lol
Yours as always Ian ..

lovedly

lovedly

6 years 2 months ago

that guy told me he was very sexual

now @72
he was like a leaf yellow below
You talk of the brighter side of life
Ian
as if you were @16
still lying low
below
let all behold
@77
you have solid gold
lol----INKON

Sparrow

Sparrow

6 years 2 months ago

Loved

You are but young, but my spirit hovers around 36 always, and it will stay there lol. A pure love of a life that was always out of reach keeps you young lol Take care and good to see you, Yours Ian ..

S

scribbler

6 years 2 months ago

Hi Ian

Yep everything recycles which kinda makes me wonder why so many people seek coffins which will almost never decay.I like your poem but wonder why you chose to go with such varied rhyme patterns....stan

Sparrow

Sparrow

6 years 2 months ago

Stan

If I was a true poet I would write with few errors, but as the words flow so I write, only the great Elf has held my sway to write poetry the correct way. lol You take care and rest a while as your walks among the aspens will be with us soon, Yours as always Ian ..