Moon Haiku

the moon's the closest
mankind can hope to get to
staring at the sun

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Maryland, USA

Comments

weirdelf

6 years 4 months ago

and

the blindest caused
without a pause
is equal to
that of love

Geezer

6 years 4 months ago

Nice work...

Is this your first attempt at Haiku? ~ Geezer.
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Cloudthings

6 years 4 months ago

Love it

Second read it has even more to say, & that's good poetry.

gregwa8

6 years 4 months ago

thanks everyone for the read

thanks everyone for the read and comments!