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lou

Malediction

My dad was a man of many words,
Unfortunately most of them consisted of profanity.
But it didn’t stop him clipping an ear,
or the side of your head, if as children we produced vulgarity.

He would weave sentences so intricate and clever,
constructed entirely of, Fuck, shit and wanker,
that left a person astounded,
that made neighbours scatter.

If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.

My mother was often mortified,
and was known to stutter,
For god sake when you grow up kids,
Don’t’ you dare swear, do not inherit this affliction.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is based on my dad , who did swear a lot, but not to this degree.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years 4 months ago

Dear Lou,

favorite lines are:

If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.

suggestions: clever instead of cleaver?

And even made that made neighbours scatter. (something wrong with this sentence)

or the side of your head, if as a children we produced vulgarity

if as children (remove "a")

Your father sounds like quite the character and I'll bet you have many fond memories and stories about him.

Love, Cat

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

Cat

Thank you, character is one word for him. LOL!!!

Love Lou

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

shirl

thank you

love lou

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

hi

Thanks , yes to wank is to jerk off lol

lou

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

Xena

my dad was a violent man, but we didnt get beaten as kids, maybe a clip round the ear at most. my mum got the beatings

love lou

lou

lou

14 years 4 months ago

Bee

Thank you so much.

Love Lou