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Malediction
My dad was a man of many words,
Unfortunately most of them consisted of profanity.
But it didn’t stop him clipping an ear,
or the side of your head, if as children we produced vulgarity.
He would weave sentences so intricate and clever,
constructed entirely of, Fuck, shit and wanker,
that left a person astounded,
that made neighbours scatter.
If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.
My mother was often mortified,
and was known to stutter,
For god sake when you grow up kids,
Don’t’ you dare swear, do not inherit this affliction.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is based on my dad , who did swear a lot, but not to this degree.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
14 years 4 months ago
Dear Lou,
favorite lines are:
If a clergy man passed by, the air was azure with blasphemy
and thick with malediction.
he made it quite an art,
And took great delight in his addiction.
suggestions: clever instead of cleaver?
And even made that made neighbours scatter. (something wrong with this sentence)
or the side of your head, if as a children we produced vulgarity
if as children (remove "a")
Your father sounds like quite the character and I'll bet you have many fond memories and stories about him.
Love, Cat
lou
14 years 4 months ago
Cat
Thank you, character is one word for him. LOL!!!
Love Lou
lou
14 years 4 months ago
shirl
thank you
love lou
KINGZOMBIE
14 years 4 months ago
Sounds like my stepdad
I think many can relate to this, Thanks for sharing it.Also, I didn't know that "wanker" was profane.
lou
14 years 4 months ago
hi
Thanks , yes to wank is to jerk off lol
lou
lou
14 years 4 months ago
Xena
my dad was a violent man, but we didnt get beaten as kids, maybe a clip round the ear at most. my mum got the beatings
love lou
lou
14 years 4 months ago
Bee
Thank you so much.
Love Lou