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Jun 23, 2019
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anniversaries
it's coming near the time we
began
this time last year,
everything was shiny and
new
this time last year,
there was a me & you
this time last year,
i was open to everything and
more
maybe i shouldn't have been
wearing my heart
on my
sleeve
opened me up to your special
brand of
pain
so here's to my naivety,
my
desperation
they're one in the same
-anniversaries
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
6 years ago
I like it...
I like the rational thought about how you fell prey to the [I presume], now ex-.
I also like the brevity and clear lines. The form leaves you hanging a little bit, when you use punctuation. It got better when you stopped using the commas and periods. Welcome to Neo. I hope to see more of your work and be sure to join the workshops and enter the monthly contest. ~ Geezer.
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