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Aug 04, 2019
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All Eyes On Me
We all say every day
eyes are only windows
all know
This version is slightly different read it and you will know.
All eyes on me
All eyes on me
Just so beautiful
eyes are windows
through which you see
they also show
smile across the window
all passersby will know
that empty eyes love do blow
let all know
the eyes when they follow
or the final word they slow
whistle for me not, no more
my eyes now don’t see
I have gone
like the whistling wind
all must know
eyes now speak no more
what to show
mind's eyes remain back
in memories to glow
till you your own eyes
also let go
eyes no more glow
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
tyro
5 years 11 months ago
I could not follow it clearly
I could not follow it clearly, but I like it anyway, especially for the atmosphere it creates. And its tendency to cause one to go into thought.
lovedly
5 years 11 months ago
read from here visualise a blind sitting behind a glass window
smile across the window
all passersby will know
that empty eyes love do blow
let all know
the eyes when they follow