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Aug 26, 2019
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My Romanian Lover
My Romanian Lover
This is the most widely read one
My Romanian lover
Through the garden path I walked
she sat astride the bench
quiet, silent and cute
her chubby dog so mute
I walked unknowingly
a short nap
oldie me
how she saw me
then rested on the opposite side
on an isolated branch of a tree
as I closed my eyes in reverie
she came alongside
and calmly sat beside
without any fear
as she smiled
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
5 years 11 months ago
The whole of the poem is in
"My Romanian Lover
This is the most widely read one
My Romanian lover
Through the garden path I walked
she sat astride the bench
quiet, silent and cute
her chubby dog so mute
I walked unknowingly
a short nap
oldie me
how she saw me
then rested on the opposite side
on an isolated branch of a tree
as I closed my eyes in reverie
she came alongside
and calmly sat beside
without any fear
as she smiled"
Definitely one of your Jewels my friend, all the rest is crap and adornment, I feel a severe pruning is needed.
lovedly
5 years 11 months ago
kindness jess after a long time
you walked my page and found a jewel.
since edited master