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Sep 20, 2019
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Dust Me Darling Deleted from main creating space
Dust me darling
now shall dust it all off
dust off my cap
have just come after a long walk
breathless right now can't talk
deep down my throat
all know
is dampened dust
from the sandy windy sea shore
how long will sneezing last
none can say
any how the dying dusk
shall sweep me away
it's a long way from the desert
where I stay
sandy dust and mellowing dusk
is our share
all night and all day
am I expected any more to say
today
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
5 years 10 months ago
This appears...
very Spartan. The lines seem to suggest that you have taken a very ordinary walk along the beach and turned it into a poem. That's okay! Not a major work here, but a slice of another's life; told to the reader. ~ Gee.
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lovedly
5 years 10 months ago
yeah thanks
glad you returned
you were away
do read stans IMAGERY
today
Geezer
5 years 10 months ago
I joined...
did you? ~Gee.
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lovedly
5 years 10 months ago
yeah
did u not notice
I withdrew this one from there
too long stan said