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Dec 06, 2019
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Sweet Mercury
If I could have been there
To hold your sweet hand
Before I’d come
I’d smooth out the sand
Quiet the ocean, silence the birds
So Your last loving song
Is all that I heard
K. Mulroney
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
c lynn brooks
5 years 6 months ago
Rottie
This poem is power packed with emotion it brought me to tears you clearly know your business
Edna Sweetlove
5 years 6 months ago
Line 3...
..is open to misinterpretation...
Rottiestyl
5 years 6 months ago
You
Have a problem
Edna Sweetlove
5 years 6 months ago
No.
The problem is in the line.
Rottiestyl
5 years 6 months ago
If you have nothing constructive
To say I will say one more time stay off my work. You continue this I will report you. Done over
Edna Sweetlove
5 years 6 months ago
Goodbye
You have my assurance I will not waste my time with you any more.
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Edna Sweetlove
5 years 6 months ago
Bye. .
Bye.
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