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Dec 25, 2019
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TO FORGIVE YOU AND ME
‘He that without sin among you,
Let him cast the first stone’ on her.
She was accused of adultery;
Those who brought her wanted justice.
‘Such women shall be stoned to death.’
Laws of Mosses profess like this.
The woman was surprised by Christ;
The crowd dispersed without a word.
‘Father, forgive them.’ Said Jesus,
‘For they know not what they do.’,
At every fall of hammer
On the nail of Crucifixion.
Attack sin, not sinners, said He.
Forgive sin; sin no more, said He
Every saint has a past;
Every sinner has a future.
Christ wants to forgive you and me;
He wants you and me to forgive.
25.12.2015
About This Poem
Review Request Direction:
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Comments
Geezer
5 years 6 months ago
As you might see...
There are few that would like to comment on any religious poetry here. There are those that will usually have their own views and sometimes express them and then the rest that just shy away. I prefer to comment on the work itself and leave the meaning and comprehension for someone else. I would suggest switching lines around so that it reads:
She was accused of adultery
Those that brought her wanted justice
Such women shall be stoned to death
Laws of Moses profess this
He that is without sin among you
Let him cast the first stone
The woman was surprised by Christ
The crowd left without a word
The rest I would leave as is.
~ Geezer.
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