A Lost Love

A love that I once had
A love all-consuming
Which I believed would live forever
Perished in the rough ocean of time.

For my lover came to love another
And my joyful world came to an end,
And I cried alone in the dark
Like a little bird with broken wings.

I know there is no hope for me
And I patiently wait for poisoned death
To give me sweet release from pain.
Failing that, I'll go and take a truly enormous dump.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: London, Culture Capital of the World

Favorite Poets: Siegfried Sassoon, Wilfred Owen, Rupert Brooke, Chaucer, Shakespeare to name but a few. And VERY IMPORTANTLY: Erich Fried, a leftwing Austrian of Jewish ancestry who fled the Nazis and became a British citizen in 1949., And, other writers (non-poets mainly): Raymond Chandler, Irvine Welsh, Anthony Burgess, Graham Greene, Charles Bukowski, John le Carré, Anthony Horowitz, Mick Herron, Margaret Attwood, Edna O'Brian, Maeve Binchy., Writers who I find vastly over-rated: TS Eliot, Virgina Woolf, Sylvia Plath, Phil Larkin, E.A. Poe, A. Ginsburg, Longfellow, Gerald Manley Hopkins (actually I LOATHE Hopkins more than damson-dappled words can say).

Comments

Obadiah Grey

5 years 9 months ago

Awwwwww. Edna.

Awwwwww. Edna.
At least you have a fully functional arse-hole to console you.

Pucker up petal, the porcelain awaiteth !

Obi.

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 9 months ago

Thank you!

I will keep your confession secret. No one will know.

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 9 months ago

It's called....

... a joke.

I am puzzled by your using a quote from some unknown trainer of wrestlers odd. How is THAT poetic? I can think of few things less poetic than either wrestling or football, the latter being a nasty game played by common thugs.

Best wishes from

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 9 months ago

Thank you for your response.

However I did not understand it. What is a newfin and what is a jacksin?
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 9 months ago

Still none the...

...wiser.

Surely the point of a joke is that it should be comprehensible?
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Edna Sweetlove

5 years 9 months ago

Aha!

Now all is clear.

I am touched that you used the English spelling, "arse" instead of the American word, "ass". It's little things like that which mend the "special friendship" after your genius president has put the world in danger by ordering the murder of an Iranian general by a fearless and gallant drone operator. I fear that will not end well.
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