Return of Chat on the Darkside...

This is where it happens
Bring your dark and dreary stuff
We don't want your hearts and flowers
Your kisses and your fluff

We want pain and heartbreak
Bloody knives and gore
We'll take your fondest nightmares
The stuff behind that door!

So come on, bring it all
Don't hold back this time
We don't care if it's sick
Free verse or in rhyme

Nine PM this Saturday
Hope to see you there
Come to Chat on the Darkside
It's dark stuff we can share!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This IS an actual invitation to a real event! This Saturday night at 9pm EST Host ~ Geezer Moderator ~ Carrie ~ The Raven Nevermore Be there, bring your dark stuff, just want to see what you can do!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Comments

Geezer

5 years 6 months ago

Yes, I guess...

you could call this a novelty poem; although it IS an invitation to a real event!
I agree with deleting the [The] from the title, but I think that I shall keep the [yours] because I wanted to call attention to the
writers bringing [their] poetry to the chat. I don't have any idea why you should be finishing the word [flowers] while starting to say Your; [flowers is at the end of the previous line]. Third stanza, 1st line: I put a comma after the word [on] to give it the proper rhythm. I don't know why you are surprised to see me rhyming, I do it all the time! Thanks for the feedback and comments, ~ Geezer.
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Geezer

5 years 6 months ago

Just show up...

with your dark side. We want to see that dusty, scary stuff you've been hiding! ~ Gee.
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cathy mccormick

5 years 6 months ago

we don't care if it is sick

we don't care if it is sick
free verse or perfect rhyme

i think this has better rhythm

hope i can make this. it would be midnight my time? (washington state). the dark is my favorite place!

Geezer

5 years 6 months ago

Yep...

midnight for you! Just bring your dark side. We want to see the scary stuff you think about. ~ Geezer.
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cathy mccormick

5 years 6 months ago

i got the time wrong! lol.

i got the time wrong! lol. you are three hours ahead so it is now 9 your time, 6 mine but i am here. just hope i can find the right place

Geezer

5 years 5 months ago

Sorry...

My fault, I'm so used to trying to transcribe to Aussie time, that I forgot that it was less time for you, not more! ~Geezer.
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