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Jan 25, 2020
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A father of a son
A father of a son
Wonderful to see
A person that look just like me
On the day he was born
Where promises
I vowed to keep
Truth and honor
Are the only drugs
He will see
I am the father of a son
His teacher of a life complete
Sometimes I take for granted
The quiet conversations in things that he needs
Questions about life
Questions about dreams
I reply you are my son be all that you can be
When you become a father
Truth and honor
Will always give you peace
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
5 years 5 months ago
The only thing...
that disappoints me about this one, is that you didn't keep up the rhyme, but it is there, you just have to unbury it! ~ Gee.
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Trouble
5 years 5 months ago
gee
I'm trying gee thanks for the love this is only the second poem that I posted maybe I'm a little rusty but I enjoy the chat line with you and all the other members
Geezer
5 years 5 months ago
My only regret...
on this one, is that you haven't kept up the rhyme! It's there, but buried! I felt it wanting, trying to get out all the way through! ~ Gee.
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lovedly
5 years 5 months ago
You replicate genes great father and son
person that lookS just...p
erhaps appears to be a typo
Trouble
5 years 5 months ago
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Maybe lovedly about the typo but can I ask your name for a proper? Introduction.my name is Pressley and it's nice to meet you