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Alstatian

Twas a dark and bitter night
My breath froze in front of me
Droplets scarring the snow below
Just a little further to go

With each step, I paused
Only to hear footfalls behind
Slowly I turned, but no one was there
A cold breeze circled and raised every hair

Suddenly the moon grew eerily bright
A silhouette drifted from its silver strands
As it weaved throughout the trees
I held my breath, hoping it wouldn't see

Slowly it approached, donning a star pelt
Glittering, its tail embraced.me, pulling me close
I felt its dead breath, cold and rank
Claws running curiously down my flank

I opened my mouth to speak
But it silenced me, as it changed
Now before me stood a man
Holding out his hand

Entranced, I accepted his invite
And to the star clad sky we went
I saw the world through colorless eyes
His rise, fall and catastrophic demise

Once upon a time, he had been somebody
Now trapped in an unfamiliar world
When we were done, he returned me
I wondered if he would now let me be

Very gently, he leaned forward
And grazed my cheek
Then he turned and let out a howl
Before fading away

For a moment, I was paralyzed
Wondering why he chose to share with me
I hadnt asked his name, though I wished I had
Then very softly, something whispered, 'Alstatian'

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison, Rudyard Kipling, Hermann Hesse, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Jack London, Stephen King, there are many more....

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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

Thank you

The poem will be displayed in tonight's Chat on the Dark side hope to see you there.

lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

Thank you

For your kind words and critique. The poem will be displayed in tonight's Chat on the dark side. Hope to see you there.

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 8 months ago

Just one criticism...

Balmy makes one think of [warm] not cold and frosty. Suggest you change it to cold, freezing etc. ~ Gee.
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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

Thanks Gee

Will make the change

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 8 months ago

What is..

...an Alstation?
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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

Alstatian

Is what the British call a German Shepherd Dog, per my research on the name. In this poem, it is the name of the spirit.

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 8 months ago

No!

You mean an Alsatian! (i.e a dog from Alsace, a part of French which is partly German-speaking and to which Germany laid claim.
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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

Thank you

For the clarification. The article I read was wrong and even misspelled the name

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 8 months ago

Might it not...

...be a good idea to correct the title to avoid confusing anyone else?

lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

5 years 8 months ago

It could simply be taken

As a character name. When I wrote prose my characters had unusual names with no real meaning

Edna Sweetlove

Edna Sweetlove

5 years 8 months ago

A bit like...

...calling a Pekinese a Pookinose? Or a Dalmatian a Dillmoron?
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