Stormy Existence

Like a snail that emerges from her shell
She doesn’t deal victorious with her life
Looking around at the many heartbreaks
She seeks its haven of life sanctuary
From the full sting of this world’s reality

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thanks Ian, your comment inspired in me this piece.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Comments

magics02

14 years 4 months ago

Very nice Barbara

Stormy Existence - nice title for this subtle write. I found many ways to relate to it. The sting of reality is all around us. Great write

Mona

Barbara Writes

14 years 4 months ago

Hey Mona

Glad you stopped by and commented. I am happy you liked it. I feel confident many others will relate in their personal way also'

thanks

weirdelf

14 years 4 months ago

I'm glad to see this is written in the 3rd person

I'm sure you've felt like this before, but I sense so much strength and confidence in you at the moment that you're probably dining on escargot.

I particularly like the insight of-
Looking around at the many heartbreaks
She seeks its haven of life sanctuary

so many use their heartbreak as an excuse, a refuge, from further life risks.

Just one suggestion, do you think a stronger word than "stings" might work better?

You've put a lot in five lines here Barbara.