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IT'S LESS THOUGHTFUL
The clock runs so fast
The Days, Hours, Minutes, Seconds
And Microseconds appears and leave
So it is with all the Months and Years
At Morning, Noon, Evening and Night
We see the sun, moon and stars
Enjoying themselves in turns
The rains come at its own time
The birds of the air
And other animals sing, dance
And enjoy their days
The human race in this world
Are busy with their life to live with
Yet months and years come and go
God so loved the world
That in His love He called us to be one
He created man and woman to be one
He made us to meet each other
It's less thoughtful that
We are here together as one body
It's less thoughtful for most
To have the same desires, dreams
And plans to grow as one
A growth not only for ourselves but for many
We are a mirror to one another
Bringing the joy of Christ to one another
Bringing the peace of Christ to one another
Bringing the love of God to one another
Its less thoughtful that
We could all meet for good
The human anger in us changes to light
The human hatred in us changes to love
And that sadness in us changes to joy
There's that beauty that emanates
From within and reflected outside
The outside then becomes affected
In all these it's less thoughtful
~Terence A.
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Comments
Eumolpus
5 years 4 months ago
A nice sermon
What does it have to do with poetry?
Read Hopkins. Same message. But it’s poetry. You’ll see what I mean immediately...
Tolerantia
5 years 2 months ago
???
Oh really? Thanks for the comment. I have read his works before. Sure, that makes each poet unique.
Blessings!
Gracy
5 years 2 months ago
Well done, but I think it
Well done, but I think it needs prunning a little. You could write a far shorter poem and give the same religious message.