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Liberty Rayne
Liberty Rayne
Mar 30, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

H.A.

Hazel eyes, bright smile.
Candied apple.
Sweet sweet succulence.
Collapsing from temptation.
Oh, Snow White darling.
Am I your poison apple?
Filling your body with my toxicity.
I want to know
What you have seen with your kind eyes.
The tears hidden so deep behind your radiant smile.
I want to know every inch of you,
Candied apple.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is about a vibrant girl, she caught my eye the first time I saw her I was instantaneously captivated by her.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, William Shakespeare, Emily Dickinson, Edgar Allen Poe, Maya Angelou.

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 3 months ago

How sweet...

Does she know? A most excellent poem about an attraction that may go either way.~ Geezer.
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Liberty Rayne

Liberty Rayne

5 years 3 months ago

I’m so nervous to tell her,

I’m so nervous to tell her, we’re just friends right now, but I hope to tell her soon. Thankyou for you invitation! And your kind words. :)

Geezer

Geezer

5 years 3 months ago

I wish...

you well. I hope things go as planned and you achieve your heart's desire. Fingers crossed! LoL. ~ Geezer.
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Adrien Brook

4 years 11 months ago

Wowww. I'm really impressed

Wowww. I'm really impressed by the juxtaposed metaphors. 'Poison apple' and 'candied apple'. I find allusions to fairy tales a bit over-done often, but I think this originality really redeemed it for me. And on top of that, the fairy tale allusion does make sense for the theme.