Walk (Inspired by T.S. Eliot, The Wasteland)

Let us walk, hand in hand,
when shadows
stretch across the land,
like a black cat
waking from its lethargy.

Let us walk
along soothing paths
of Night,
who lays her cool lips
on our scars.
Night saturated with silences
without veil or falsehood:
I divine white roses
on the certain pinewood,
I foresee the fistful of earth,
I know the limit
that dusk intimates.

Let us walk: night is soon.
For a few instants
reality will be dissolved
under the tepid providence of the moon.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Río Negro, Argentine Patagonia, ARG

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, T.S. Elliot. Shakespeare, Gongora, Beckett, etc. Many others, such as Cervantes. I have to thank my mother because she read poetry to me from the cradle, so first I learned by memory and soon understood the words. Grammar comes naturally at about 5 years old, without any formal teaching.

Comments

Rula

5 years 1 month ago

Aweee!

Marvelous with exquisite, classy imagery.
Kodous!

Gracy

5 years ago

Well, thank you Rula. I was

Well, thank you Rula. I was re-reading Eliot and was inspired by a section in Wasteland that has similar structure.
All the best, thanks, Gracy

Gracy

5 years ago

Always the gentleman, Sir

Always the gentleman, Sir Jerry! Thank you for your gallant comments, much appreciated, m'Lord.
Best to you and Lynda, Gracy

Geezer

5 years ago

The first...

stanza makes the scene and sets the tone for the whole poem. Wow! ~ Geez.
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Gracy

5 years ago

Thank you, Gee, always

Thank you, Gee, always encouraging fellow poets. Will there be a chat tonight? We have Eastern time, you?
Look forward to chatting, if it's today. Raining cats and dogs for 2 days running. Yesterday we walked out in the mud when it cleared for about an hour. Hope it will happen today. I love snow, but rain gets me down.
All the best.

Gracy

5 years ago

Hello Teddy, so glad you like

Hello Teddy, so glad you like my poem, especially the first line. I'll look up the line that I borrowed from Eliot, can't remember exactly. I just wrote from memory.
All the best, Gracy

Gracy

5 years ago

Hello again, Teddy, the lines

Hello again, Teddy, the lines below are the ones that inspired me. I always loved Eliot and this is from The Love Song of Alfred J.Prufrock. Have you read it?

Let us go then, you and I,
When the evening is spread out against the sky
Like a patient etherized upon a table;

Glad I found it.