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Jun 25, 2020
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Archaic Rainbows
I just went out
rain simmering
the sun trying to find its ways
through autumn leaves
but then as I stood still
saw two rainbows
lined one far away
another smaller
I went to the loo
to think if I could
with a third do
pulled curtains
and
switched on my torch
wow third rainbow came
did you not see
as I did longer than long pee
o me silly
asking Sally
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lovedly
5 years ago
15 thanks to you but
can you tell me
why others don't read me
and if they
why the fx they don't say
a word
or
2 x2
Gracy
5 years ago
Hi Lovedly, your poem reminds
Hi Lovedly, your poem reminds me of seeing 3 rainbows over the pampas in Argentina. Your going to the loo made me laugh. Your title is perfect and the theme also.
I'll return as it's late now, all the best, Gracy
lovedly
5 years ago
return you must
its a pleasure ma'am
My first ENGLISH BOOK was from Argentina
FAR AWAY AND LONG AGO
DID you ever read it
ALL about orchards
guys and gals roamed about
like free birds
BUTTERFLIES AND Queenbees
full of flutter and honey