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Rula

Jun 25, 2020 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

#Palestine

"On the other side
of the river
the grass is greener."

I wonder though,
the cattle are less happy,
and so is the sky.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I just wonder how much my reader could get out of this without me explaining. I think the title might give a hint as titles should.

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Jordan, JOR

Favorite Poets: I favor the ones who are closer to humanity and , Poets are humanity when the world lose it.

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5 years ago

Dear teddy

I'll keep the grey color in mind for a more dark mood.
Thank you!

5 years ago

The cattle...

Perhaps should be the herd? I wanted the people who live there under the occupation.

5 years ago

Both

The sky and the people are under occupation, so sadness is the general mood there.

5 years ago

In this case

I think changing to gray is more accurate I believe.

5 years ago

I like

the play of words, but then I fear that the reader would think it a typo.

5 years ago

Dearest Teddy

Knowing that I live in Jordan (on the other side of Jordan river) does that help understanding in any way?
You are not far though.
Thanks for your everlasting encouraging words dear.

5 years ago

Dear Teddy

Jordan is well known for the best olive trees and olive oil, so you're totally right dear Teddy but this is just part of the story.
I thank you truely.

5 years ago

Italy too

Is well known for olives.. I believe!

5 years ago

I am...

thinking, that you have seen the cattle on the 'other side' and don't think that the grass is any greener or the sky any bluer. ~ Geezer.
.

5 years ago

Dear Geezer

Things to admit,
First, this little piece is born as a result of the title workshop. I found out that titles could inspire real poems.

Second, Jordan and Palestine were one land with only river Jordan to separate them, but the fact that Palestine is greener is true, it's soil is more fertile.

Third, the cattle here represnts the people of Palestine,
and they're unhappy as well as the sky all because of the occupation.

Hope I make it clearer.

5 years ago

I did not...

know that in fact, Palestine is greener! That notion did not even enter into my mind. Yes, it is clearer now. Thank you, ~ Geez.
.

5 years ago

my comment flew with

the flu lol

5 years ago

Flue... Flew

Why?

5 years ago

Does

Not blue or less blue work better?

5 years ago

Yeah

I think this clears the confusion dear Teddy!
Can't thank you enough for keeping me on the right track!
Appreciate your help dear.

5 years ago

Sorry

for the echooooo

Edna Sweetlove

5 years ago

It is sad that...

...Palestine is denied statehood and decency by the Israelites and their American stooges.
.

5 years ago

Edna!

Never enough to feel sorry.
Palestinian never stop fighting for their freedom.
Thank you for reading and the sympathy though.

Edna Sweetlove

5 years ago

The Israelites...

...need a good THRASHING.
.

R

5 years ago

Hi Rula

Liked thee verses...

be well...take best care...

5 years ago

Dear Raj

Thank you! I am so happy to see you on my page.