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Jul 25, 2020
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A Growing Need (Racy)
Like dawn in heat
I am already slave to your loins
our impending collision
the meeting of body and mind
immanent
A gentle run of tongue
shimmers parched rims,
lost fingers are confused
with buttons and holes
Slowly fabrics are rent
falling to retire in shreds
letting shadow and light
rest on the fusing of our skin
The rod of your desire
is arched to my wetness
as buds tip your lips
my mouth parts
descending to my knees
your shaft slides down my cheek
discovering my mouth...
and the guttural sound of sin
A moving campaign
of desire, mind bending waves
traveled all the rooms with a view
unbridled hands, roamed
without thought of destiny
The whole of your intent
is rapaciously introduced to heaven
overwhelmed and conquered
I am now a lost continent
awaiting your next expedition
And suspended in
a pure vacuum of ecstasy
so exquisite it rests on my soul
I am imprinted for all time
... through the window
an icy breeze dimples my skin
and I lay in amber light
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
4 years 11 months ago
Yo! Mama...
that is some good stuff! Whew! Like one of my wife's murder/ romance novels! ~ American Bro.
Seren
4 years 11 months ago
Dear Bro
Hahaha glad you liked it. I like to make an entrance when I return lmao
Love you Aussie Sis xx
c lynn brooks
4 years 11 months ago
whoa
you a back with fireworks lol
Seren
4 years 10 months ago
Dear sweet Chrys
Hahaha yep I am most definitely back lol
My love as always
Jayne x
Gracy
4 years 11 months ago
Yay! You write hot, lol.
Yay! You write hot, lol. Congrats on all your fiery imagery and feelings. The title is fine and the content as well. I won't nit because I understand you don't want to edit anymore.
Best, Gracy
Seren
4 years 10 months ago
Dear Gracy
Yo Mama huh ? I will take that as a compliment lol thanks for the read and my apologies for the very late reply didn't get a notification for any of these comments and it's been edited so many times my head started to spin lol but I am always happy for suggestions.
Kindest Regards Jayne
scribbler
4 years 11 months ago
Good
to see you are back to your old self. Now I gotta take a cold shower...........
Seren
4 years 10 months ago
Dear Bro
Hahaha yep I am back. Hope the shower was nice since it's hot up your way LMAO !!
Love Sis
Seren
4 years 10 months ago
Oh my God I needed a laugh
Oh my God I needed a laugh was very happy to find these comments. Very glad you liked my smut
Kindest regards Jayne x
raj
4 years 11 months ago
Hi Jayne
very sensuous write ...choice of words take make the reader visualize the moves and feelings emoting...i remember i used to writ sensuous poems which you and few others like Mand, Candlewitch, and others used to like and some like Stan used to comment "i need a cold shower" like he has done above...lol....
by the way any news about Candlewitch?...haven't seen her post or comment for a very long time...
be well...take best care and try to post more often as much as you can...
Seren
4 years 10 months ago
Dear Raj
Candlewitch is very much active on the site Hon go check out her latest poems. Lol all these cold showers are starting to really crack me up. (Insert laughing crying face) I am Very happy you liked my poem I encourage you to write a cold shower poem lets call them. I used to enjoy your sensual poems. They had a haunting beauty I really did enjoy them. Xx
Love and biggest hugs Jayne x