TEMPEST( mixed meter for Wes' shop)

All thunder and heavy rain
mere minutes in the past
sun now shining,'twas in vain
fierce storms seldom last

About This Poem

Last Few Words: just an itty bitty ditty

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

Candlewitch

14 years 4 months ago

Trmpest!!!

Dear Scribbler,

This is purely delightful!!! And so true. It put me in mind of a summer storm that arises quickly, does it's damage and dissipates just as fast as it came.

always, cat

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

hello cat

tempests not in the form of weather also pass quickly. Thanks for coming by...............stan

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

tempest

thank you on both counts...............stan

scribbler

14 years 4 months ago

tempest

Like a tempest even gas passes..........................stan

Race_9togo

14 years 4 months ago

Interesting,

how one can apply images of weather as metaphor to one's own experiences, so easily yet so subtlely.
This one's very good, I would change not a thing.