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Fuck covid 19 and august
I had a life
Finally i was free to live the normal way
I could lie and dance along to their rhythms
I could at last live a’ normal’ day
But then this happens
Coping mechanisms gone up shit’s creek
My ability to fake to emotions perish
My stamina weak
I build heavier walls
Found strange comfort in the loneliness
Cut off connection to friends alike
Feel into my void abyss
Now I’m picking up pieces
Acceptance is a new term
I’ve never considered it before
But I guess I’ll learn
I’ve lost so much
And learned from it
now my scattered pieces lay on the floor
loved ones ripped away from the collection
now i see a broken figure
when i look at my reflection
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
4 years 10 months ago
Such authencity... i have heard friends
Say things very similar. like in conversations with them on the phone, or in an email. Nice capture of the rawness of our calamity.
Candlewitch
4 years 10 months ago
hello,
I agree with Teddy! please enter this in the contest, and good luck!
*always, Cat
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FreddieM
4 years 5 months ago
yes
I love this the rhyming fits so feel for the emotion you're trying to get across. like a facetime call with a friend seems casually written but can tell the thought and process behind the raw emotions. fist verses seem to not fit perfectly but could be intended it seems to work. the rest is gold imagery is very nice I enjoyed it a lot. gets across the frustration and lack of motivation despite having to pull through for others. love it
Dandini
4 years 5 months ago
Dear Mark, I am sorry to hear
Dear Mark, I am sorry to hear you have contracted Covid-19 and I wish you a full recovery.
Ray Whitaker
4 years 5 months ago
Good Luck to you Mark
best wishes for a speedy uncomplicated recovery
scribbler
4 years 5 months ago
Resignation
although easy to give into should never be indulged. I like your poem