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Dec 12, 2020
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So deep within the galaxies,
The limits of my searching mind,
Your constant love had once installed
A compass of the truest kind.
It should have been the polar star,
The guide on my oft chancy quest.
I knew that, as I traveled far,
Your loving thoughts would guide me best.
They flamed as though they were a torch,
A beacon meant to guide my heart
Into that peaceful port--that’s you--
But, somehow, we then grew apart.
How was it then, that I had failed
To keep our rendezvous somewhere
In life? Throughout the time that passed,
You never failed; you’ve done your share.
My health and youth waned all too soon
And worldly fortune took to flight;
The truth is that I failed myself
When I refused to heed your light.
— VanRyan, Dec 12, 2020
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Ray Whitaker
5 years 6 months ago
Wow
Left me humbled. Fine piece you got there.
VanRyan
5 years 5 months ago
Hello Ray,
I appreciate your nice comment. Thank you so much. Van.
Geezer
5 years 5 months ago
Nice stuff...
I guess that a new perspective makes for a different outlook. I like the rhyme, it makes it feel kind of fuzzy warm. ~ Geezer.
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VanRyan
5 years 5 months ago
Thank you, Geezer;
your comment is more than appreciated. Best to you,
Van. (aKa JerryK.)
Geezer
5 years 5 months ago
I never...
would have guessed! ~ Geez.
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VanRyan
5 years 5 months ago
Geezer,
sorry for the deception,and now you may send me into exile, although I have no problem with you; I just felt the need for a fresh start;therefore the new alias. Take care, and have a great Christmas. Lynda and I have decorated the house, indoors and outdoors.
Be well. Jerry
VanRyan
5 years 5 months ago
Thanks for reading, Ms. Thalassa;
It seems to work either way, but I'll think about it. Happy New Year. Van, aka Jerry
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