Thoughts Adrift

My thoughts
Rise from the shore;
Again, as before,

They cross the bay,
Seek out a crest
And come to rest.

One gull
Glides into view—
Could it be you

Searching
The misty sea
For me?

You turn away
Into the haze,
Uncertain
As always.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Arizona, USA

Comments

Asche Keegan

4 years 6 months ago

Dear VanRyan

Those last three stanzas hit home. Amazing job! I really like the rhythm you use, and I feel like you perfectly captured longing and loneliness.

VanRyan

4 years 6 months ago

Dear Ms. Kareyn;

thank you so very much for liking my little poem. No, lonely I am not; I am simply a chameleon, well versed in changing my appearance--figuratively, of course. I appreciate your kind comment . Van.

Lavender

4 years 6 months ago

Thoughts Adrift

Hello, Van,
What beautiful sentiment and imagery.
Thank you,
L

VanRyan

4 years 6 months ago

Hello, Ms. Lavender

I wish to thank you very much for your thoughtfully expressed comment. Thank you. Van (aka Jerry)

lovedly

4 years 6 months ago

That you are a Virgo ----chammelion appears distinct

but to you poetry comes
as an instinct
as in my mind poets views
instantly sink
and i compose comments
and say amen
take em as my poems
and most do
you will too
ask Gee will you

VanRyan

4 years 6 months ago

Thanks Lovedly,

but actually I'm a libra chameleon. Nevertheless, I appreciate your comment.
Van

lovedly

4 years 6 months ago

virgo libra date fixes wheter one is virgo or libra

also time specifications of birth r important lol ryan tc