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Jan 28, 2021
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GOODBYE?...or
Thank you for the nothing you have always given me
I think now I would prefer to be alone
There has never not been a ¨but¨
Please push me away so I do not have to be brave Your words are meaningless yet they make for every thought that goes through my head
What direction should I go of course you dont know
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Well there is this person.
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
c lynn brooks
4 years 5 months ago
okay
your last line is very long
and where were you going with this as it is more of a statement then a poem
Ray Whitaker
4 years 5 months ago
Welcome to the site!
Teddy’s edit of your piece is worth considering.
I am looking forward to reading more from you. Keep writing!
Geezer
4 years 5 months ago
Yes...
Welcome to Neo. I hope that you will take these comments to heart and continue to write good stuff. The last line is a bit long and Teddy has made it a bit more readable. Trying to get a relationship right is hard, but I have confidence that you will make it! You ask all the right questions! ~ Geezer.
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