Tonight and Every Other Night

I don’t know your middle name but,
tonight I imagined us going down to the park,
to tell the moon about our dreams,
and to dance for the stars as they sing to us.

I don’t know your middle name but,
last night I pictured you holding me on my couch
telling me about your childhood.

I don’t know your middle name but,
tomorrow I will plan sewing an 'M' on your hoodie sleeve
and putting a note in your pocket just before you leave.

I don’t know your middle name,
or much else at all but,
in my eyes my love,
you are all mine.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Catie Rosemurgy, Lucie Brock-Broido, Seamus Heaney

Comments

c lynn brooks

4 years 5 months ago

Hello

Interesting that you use "middle name"
last line I believe there is a tiny typo (im) did you mean in?

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

I've read three of your 3 poems
you are maddy Madeline or mddy/midday
but poems will shine like moon light
every day
continue to say
what you may
but for worldly success
read and critique/comment
on all poems read
of other poets
have their egos
well fed

Rula

4 years 5 months ago

Mddy

The one thing I'm sure about is that "M" is yours no matter what your middle name is
Good job!

Ray Whitaker

4 years 5 months ago

Nice theme!

Heartfelt piece, I am looking forward to reading more from you!

Geezer

4 years 5 months ago

I understand...

the "I don't know your middle name", part! It's something to let us know that you don't know everything, [or a lot] about this fella, but you do know that you have a deep connection with him. I would take a look at a couple of your lines:
"I plan on sewing [an] M on you[r] hoodie sleeve." [Delete the [will]. And: "[in] my eyes..." Nice write, and very relatable.
~ Geezer.
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