WHY I DON'T KNOW

She silently sleeps besides me
in fear of my not waking up
so she continues to keep awake
till I snore

and

in the morning hours
continues to sleep
when I don't snore

am I alive she wonders
doc hath said
heart attack
has he gone

then I wake up and clap
Ah a hot cup of tea
she doesn't smile

gosh you are living
and
holds her breath
for a longer while

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Daily routine Is it love or fear tell me anyone Ere it's time up.MY NEW FORMAT RW INSPIRED

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Lavender

4 years 5 months ago

Why I Don't Know

Hello, Lovedly,
Very sensitive poetry - tender, but direct. If I read your last few words correctly, you ask if it is love or fear. As we are only human, maybe both? You offer much to think about here, Lovedly. (Is this Eastern structure, as listed? Intriguing form.)
Thank you,
L

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

Freestyle I only compose

Western I did a few
Eastern I don't know
My eye's limitation half blind
and
the darkened snowy cold night minus16 that night...
at night dimmed lamplight
she sleeps while I type..

This is not really a reality
but I visit somebody
they both smile at me
and
Lav you may also
do if you wish so
lemme know

(have you realised
a bit of my new syle...
format RW inspired)

Geezer

4 years 5 months ago

Very perceptive...

Yes, I find myself listening in the dark, waking several times through the night, [I sleep badly because of medical issues].
My wife, who sleeps in another room and has heart problems, wakes me as she passes to the bathroom and in the morning, when I can see the light in the kitchen through the cracks in my bedroom door; I feel relieved and can open the door without fear. A very well thought out piece. Nicest I've seen from you in a while. ~ Geez.
.

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

thank u Gee

your perception is inspirational
so i live still

They say isolation ...loneliness ...are the worst forms of solitude

so what to do

just LIVE with glee
Gee
thanks to thee
feel free