Free Wonderer

I've often wondered
why our vast vision
is scared of a wanderer

freely called death
I have oft wondered
why the likes of our ilk

treat it as a care
which even mammals
do not much stare

I have oft wondered
why does our intelligence wander
to and beyond the darkness

there lies only loneliness
now tell me how often
you wander so that I may not suffer

the skies are still so blue
snows just pass through
can this wonder be an imagery
why a fall is needed before snowfall

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

Comments

Lavender

4 years 5 months ago

Maiden Villanelle

Hello, Lovedly,
Beautiful poetry - " ...the skies are still so blue, snow comes just through." I looked up the villanelle form before commenting, but need more education. I see the nineteen lines and the five tercets followed by the quatrain. Must there always be rhyme, too? Very interesting!
Thank you!
L

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

Hi Lave thanks

thanks

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

hi again

Lavender

4 years 5 months ago

Maiden Villanelle

Hi, Lovedly,
I see the rhyme in your third stanza. We've studied villanelles here on Neopoet a few times, and I am still grasping its form. It's one of Alan's favorite poetry styles. He may be able to give some insight along with Stan. I can tell you that your poem gives a lot to ponder. Beautiful language.
Thank you, Lovedly!
L

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks a lot Lave

pl delete ur comment thnx

scribbler

4 years 5 months ago

Well, vanilla

is OK but I prefer chocolate lol. Whew!.... Now I got that out of my system I'll applaud you for this deep poem

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks stan

i take red wine
I SHALL ask your local guy to send u some .
pl thank him and pay on my behalf u may
i take a peg only once in a way
lol
nice to c u on my page
TAKE it as a
HAPPY B'DAY