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Garden of Life

The Supreme One detached the sky and the earth,
Split the Sun and moon,created stars.
The creator created a creature,
to tender and nurture the creatures he created

Flowers in the garden, life in the garden
Flower wither,flower blossom
The sole of each life
Water watered the flower garden
The soul in the soil, sprout radiant
The length and quality reside in him
Some thorns, some roses and daffodils
Rose felt love and spread same
Torn was bitter, so he spread hatred

The vine dresser pluck out at will
Some at dawn, Other at dusk
Time and season happens to them all
Watch the flower flaunt in the garden.
Flower of life, soon food for another.

Toyemlaw
(c)People's Poet

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria, Lagos

Comments

scribbler

4 years 5 months ago

Greetings

Welcome to Neopoet. Using the garden to represent life was well done.......stan

Toyemlaw

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks Stan, I appreciate.

Thanks Scribbler, I appreciate.

chima ononogbu

4 years 5 months ago

Hi Friend

Well put together.

Toyemlaw

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks Chima.

Lavender

4 years 5 months ago

Garden of Life

Hello, Toyemlaw,
Welcome!
Lots to think about in your poem - I especially appreciated the image of the sun and moon splitting, and the creation of the stars. A bit of sparkling magic! Your last line is strong and brings the poem full circle with your title.
Thank you!
Lavender