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Titty-Bear and Cotton-Candy Heart...
On nights when you are asleep
And I can't close my eyes
I lie there thinking and I weep
Because I am not so wise
I can't tell how much I love you
There are no words to say
I'm so grateful you said "I do"
I'll love you everyday
On my chest is a Titty-Bear
Close to my beating heart
I had them put it there
And then I had it start
Heart full of cotton-candy
Sweet as any rhyme
Heart of cotton-candy is just dandy
Keeping time with mine
About This Poem
Last Few Words: For my wife on Valentine's Day
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Geezer
4 years 5 months ago
Had to say it...
for the rhyme and because I'm not so wise as to be able to tell her how much I love her. ~ Geez.
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Geezer
4 years 5 months ago
Thank you Teddy...
I know that you feel this and understand what it is to love so much. ~ Geez.
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chima ononogbu
4 years 5 months ago
So touchy
Nothing is ever enough for one so dear and so loving.
Lavender
4 years 5 months ago
Titty-Bear and Cotton-Candy Heart...
Hi, Geezer,
"Heart full of cotton candy." A very sweet Valentine! Your love and great devotion are felt throughout!
Thank you!
L
Geezer
4 years 5 months ago
No, Thank you!...
You ladies are among my biggest fans and I am always glad to hear what you have to say. [It's always good!] I am almost ashamed of your praise, [at least bashful, I blush when I read your comments!] Thank you all, for being so supportive. Yes, I love my wife very much and I am glad that it shows. ~ Geez.
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Lavender
4 years 5 months ago
It shows! It shows!
I hope you both had a wonderful Valentine's Day!
L