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c lynn brooks
Feb 21, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The absence of you

I need you
more than ever
more than words can tell

Was it not just a small time ago
we slept as lovers do
where are you now

Your hand upon a soapy wet body
you chuckled as the water splashed at you
oh the memories
they flood back in torrents

Now all that is left
the tears of heartbreak

You left with no word of good bye
I searched for ever
to no avail

You fell off the edge of the earth only to
return
as my nemesis
my albatross
my memory

About This Poem

Last Few Words: memories can destroy

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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c lynn brooks

4 years 4 months ago

Ray

Thank you so much for visiting and commenting yes it was all so bittersweet I do appreciate you stopping by

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c lynn brooks

4 years 4 months ago

Teddy

Thank you ever so much I will re visit when feeling better and look at your suggestions more closly sadness yes mch sadness was wrapped up in this writing

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 4 months ago

I am...

sure that there are those out there, that can identify with this piece and the strong emotions that you elicit. Teddy has given all the critique I would have. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks

4 years 4 months ago

Gee

thank you I sent you a private message regarding this poem

Lavender

Lavender

4 years 4 months ago

The Absence of You

Hello, Chrys,
I feel the sadness within this, and the heavy pain in the last stanza. Well written, Chrys.
Thank you,
L

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c lynn brooks

4 years 4 months ago

Lavi

I always look forward to your visits thanks for commenting I am glad the sadness came through in this poem it was eant to