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Mar 10, 2021
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Sunrise Sunset On Your Demise
The sunshine, in your eyes
shines brightly, before your demise
quietly, your smile declines
sunlight no longer strives.
the family did not know, a better you, hide
behind everyday struggles, and trials
the children forsook service, your graveside
as you observe from on high.
so, give your flowers now, while alive
before your sunset dies.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: a poem from the heart at what I saw when a family can't get it right before they die
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
4 years 3 months ago
A touching piece
Thank you for posting this
Barbara Writes
4 years 3 months ago
thanks
glad you like
Barbara Writes
4 years 3 months ago
thanks
im glad you like it. I made the change . it sound good