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Mar 10, 2021
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Show The Candle Light
The stars studded in snow.....
today is plus 5 ~yet as cold as snow~
going out for a walk
~with the sun on~ and
in hand a candle ~will help the stars to melt ~~~
keeping the snow below~
embraced do you follow~~~
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ray Whitaker
4 years 4 months ago
The candle
Was what I could grab onto. I suspect you have been writing much longer that I, and am working with the question you posed at the end. Sure to have a meaning there that I cannot seem to grasp.
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
nothing much except
after a long time I was going for a snowy walk
all alone
slippery snow
so I was warned
hold on
old age is no friend
nor sage
all age
meaningless poem perhaps
don't fall
avoid the cage
Ray Whitaker
4 years 4 months ago
Talented, sir
I wish all my thiughts were as poetic as yours
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
Your evaluation surpasses the height Sir
of the world's highest mountain
the Everest
the Alps
Some day shall Bow
if life permits me
now 81 plus
My rgds
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
ANOTHER WORSER MONTH AHEAD
When its snowing its okay
now the melting
the sun will not shy away
lower temperatures and windy chill
will politely kill
so stay still
snows will
can't save
the electric bill
lovedly
4 years 4 months ago
yeah they will say
switch back to olden days
follow the olden saints
quaint no
i told all neo years ago
compose your own
why follow like the birds and the bees
poetry in the world will coz of you cease
as newer poets don't opportunity seize
ask stan what to do f
or a better more observant
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