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Mar 11, 2021
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self
Clearer the thought,
deeper the soul,
more original I am,
the lonelier I become.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rc0jyQgbxqQ&t=375s
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
4 years 4 months ago
I would have...
chosen a different title, The one that you used, didn't seem to match the thought behind the poem. Maybe; something like
Introvert? Anyway, I can see how one could become lonelier as they look deeper into themselves, ignoring the outside world.
I am usually into short works, but this one just begs for a little more. Welcome to Neo. I know that you have been here at the site for more than a week or two, but I haven't had occasion to comment on anything you have done thus far. So again, Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Ray Whitaker
4 years 4 months ago
Welcome to the site
I’ll look forward to reading what you post here.
Nice short piece... perhaps needs a bit more of something to chew on for we readers? I liked what you have there.