Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Apr 04, 2021
⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
IF I WERE NOT TO BE
After an audition I did see
everyone crying even me
Singing a song
for a dying daddy
and
he besides mommy
also weeping
Oh what a grave situation can it be
have you ever imagined
so let me see
I still here be
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
4 years 3 months ago
I wouldn't have...
been as perceptive as Teddy, and might have thought that it was an actual funeral. Whatever. I did appreciate the fact that it was emotional. Nice job! ~ Geez.
.
lovedly
4 years 3 months ago
GEEZ
May read please both versions
and apply the yardstick
of emotion
lovedly
4 years 3 months ago
second version
as a challenge
now posted neo permitted