Cohabitation

I remember the days, years ago,
of negotiating our terms of living together
Learning to navigate each other’s emotional maps

It was an awkward and exciting time
Nothing was too much to ask,
nothing too small to remember

Here we are now, in our days of gold,
trying to agree on what we want to plant in our garden,
or which book we should both read next

I’ll fall asleep tonight next to you
with hope and a chance to see my best friend again
In the dusty amber morning light
Filtered through windows
you asked me to clean weeks ago!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Couples living together is the MOST inexact art, to be sure. But it's also a bit of magic when you discover that you can do it reasonably well, and get it right much of the time, LOL! Anyway, that's what I was trying to capture here.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Candlewitch

4 years 3 months ago

hello,

I like your title, as well as the poem itself. I think it tells a story of give and take,which is what successful couples do. this flows very well. I liked the touch of humor at the end...made me *smile!

*hugs, Cat

Michael Anthony

4 years 3 months ago

Thanks C! Glad this worked

Thanks C! Glad this worked for you. Appreciate your thoughts!

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Gracy

4 years 3 months ago

Lovely poem about a couple.

Lovely poem about a couple. That's how one's parents usually kept together (infidelities were mostly overlooked).
The title, the flow and the theme appeal to me. No nits.
Enjoyed, Gracy

Michael Anthony

4 years 3 months ago

Hi Gracy! This one is more

Hi Gracy! This one is more autobiographical, so it's taken many years to gel into a poem. Sometimes I try to capture a moment, or maybe many decades. Poetry is always amazing in its' ability to compress or expand time.

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Geezer

4 years 3 months ago

This actually...

is a reasonably accurate picture of what it is like to live with another human being that you care about. You share the space and the duties. Taking out the garbage, washing the dishes, etc. You forgive the failings of one another and forget your own duties now and then. Good write, not a thing I would change. ~ Geez.
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