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Chiori
Chiori
Apr 24, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

What we call government

Bunch of old fools,
Dining on dreams to come
You see.

Is this government?
Union of pregnant men,
Old fools, this country's hope they've swallowed.

We would have been better than this
If not that you don't want to die,
Me either.

No light, No job, No food
A government of Agbada and Dansiki, mchew, hunchback government.

Under trees for education
Potholes you call roads
Death traps for medicals.

We prefer to fold our hands and watch,
You don't know,
If your brother dies today
Tomorrow might be your turn.

What we call government
Is a jest
A bunch of cumbags

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Pls feel free to comment whatever you feel is appreciated Either for the work or the topic all appreciated. I'll keep telling the young men to be strong and watch out for a better Nigeria. There is hope

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , Abuja, NGA

Favorite Poets: John Donne, Williams Wordsworth, Wole Soyinka, Sola Owonibi, Jared Angira, Langston Hughes, P.O.C Umeh, Sir. Walter Raleigh

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 2 months ago

hello,

you write of an outdated and ineffectual system of government. this poem is quite compelling and stirs the reader's blood. things are tough all over and knowing that you are in dire straights, makes me sad. keep on writing, maybe some good will come from it. good luck.

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

4 years 2 months ago

I think that...

if you keep writing and telling the young men these stories, it will make a difference! I will keep you in my thoughts and hope for a better Nigeria. ~ Geez.
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