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alone

Represent it cause you’re in it,
don’t you love the way life lies?
Deep in the despair, rise in originality,
there dwells loneliness, it's embellished.

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About This Poem

Last Few Words: dont have any

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Too many to name

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 2 months ago

There are so many...

ways that this can be taken. The only thing that I would change is the word [rise] I would use [risen]. ~ Geez.
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