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May 20, 2021
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intern
Interning only at life,
formed figure, out on the field,
Internalizing everything, never
look at me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LbPm_HQfwSc&t=5s
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
4 years 2 months ago
I think that...
your opening line would be better if you switched it around a little to say: "Only interning in life" ~ Geezer.
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