Random challenge 3, (children's poem)

Kangawhattsitt.

In the shade of a Bongo Bongo tree
sits a leopard with no spots,
he's accompanied by his brothers three
who are peppered through with dot's,

The poor little chap is rather down
wondering why he's beigey brown
with not a spot or dot in sight
his future maybe -- not so bright,

Alas on the Serengeti plain
where spotted dotted leopard reign
a beigey brown,, no just won't do,,
looks much too much -- like a kangaroo, !!

Obi.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This has passed muster and been given a two thumbs up by Emily, aged seven n half!!

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: int'topfield, GBR

Favorite Poets: Felix Dennis, Brian Bilston,

Comments

Arrow

4 years 1 month ago

Charming!

I love children's poetry. It flows well. Has the "wait for it"! ending (like a kangaroo!). For me the only trouble spot is the flow of line 4. Maybe "peppered through and through with dots" or something else where the syllable stress better matches line 2. Great use of different rhyme in stanzas, internal rhyme, repetition, and a little alliteration (beige-y brown). Nice job! No wonder it passed muster.