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Jun 06, 2021
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Dawns early light
Here I sit and here I stare .
My arms are weak
and my legs are bare.
My body shakes off
any feeling or care .
As it is numbed
by the folly
frigid air.
Snowflakes fall
upon my face
fully freezing
It into place .
My mind
is going
into the light .
For it has given
up on the fight .
my world now
fades into white .
Giving birth to
dawns early light .
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Gracy
4 years 1 month ago
Hi Edward, I really like your
Hi Edward, I really like your poem. I'm not sure why this person has given up on the fight. Does he go back to the beginnings? I like your title, rhymes and spacing. No nits, just not clear about one or two parts. I'll return.
Edward nigma
4 years 1 month ago
Thank you
Well what I meant is that his mind is going away because it gave up or loss the war of life
so he fades with the darkness of death
and is lifted up into the white light of the unknown afterlife.
Again I thank you for reading my poem .