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North Coast Heroes
We travelled up the Northern California Coast
Raining so much the roads filled with water;
headed to Fort Ross, our November destination
You held my hand all the way
Water to the floorboards, a highway landslide,
liquid, muddy and indifferent
Nothing was said as we exhaled our alarm
I held your hand tighter
The storm, somehow angrier because of this,
let us know it was still young and full of rage
as we neared the rental on the hill
as it was known by the local knowers of such things,
well hidden by the night and neighboring trees
The storm voiced its’ displeasure with our arrival,
and our small braveries from the day,
with a harder rain and swirling “boomers”
smashing against the shore nearby – so loud!
As we sat on the steps of a rickety deck,
rain splashing and pounding all around us,
trading heroic tales from our journey
we laughed so much our stomachs ached
And we held hands even tighter
Visiting local landmarks the next day,
we felt obliged to pay our respects to the totem gods,
standing valiant and unswayed,
stacked one on top of the other
perched high on the coastal rocks
Making their magic faces of anger and bluster
Frightening away the weaker spirits of harm
while looking after the people of the coast,
and those who still visit them there
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Recounting an early trip with my wife, which turned out to be a wonderful journey, weather be damned!
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Comments
Michael Anthony
2 years 11 months ago
Appreciate you digging
Appreciate you digging through the dustbin of my poems Mark, thank you! Glad you liked this one.
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