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Jul 15, 2021
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As I
As I cover my eyes, but not in shame
I still see the one who was chosen to blame.
As I cover my mouth, no words shall I speak,
holding so much in eventually becomes deep...
As I cover my ears no disgrace will I hear,
as I run in the shadow of darkness hoping to disappear.
I hold my nose, for no scent of a smell
as my brothers and sisters survive in this place of hell.
My hands I keep free, as I stare at the color
I know now I was born a child of the Negro Mother....
About This Poem
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
3 years 9 months ago
So well written
Wow! Such good rhyming, such a message, and a real “zinger” in the last line.